AngelsTearDrop wrote:
Much better! I think you could also go with plain old dashes in the phone number as well, the vertical rules there might be a tad overkill.

i don't even know if you need to list ALL those things, perhaps just saying "fashion and portrait photographer"  

and then on our website have individual galleries for those things.

also i'd use .'s for the phone number... if you're going to leave the |'s between the listing.